It was Saturday, I was sitting near my window reading a book and" lag ja gale "was playing on my Spotify.
My favorite thing to sit quietly alone and staring at highway. A silent highway attracted me a lot because it was so much noisy in a whole day. At midnight it became silent but not sleepy. One or two small cars were till knocking him. Big trucks made loud sound and tried to wake him up. I love that silence and old songs of kishore Kumar on my loop.
It was around 12:30 a.m. everyone was sleeping and I felt hungry. So I went to the kitchen to grab my favorite snack item Shankarpali. I was munching and humming a song. Suddenly I saw one lady walking on the road. She wore a white sari and had beautiful black and long hair. Within a blink she sat. That sight was little bit confusing because of the way she was sitting on the hedge of the road. The moving vehicles didn't bother her at all. And I saw her hair started to roll down on the road. It look like she was sitting by posing her back towards the highway and her hair was lying all over the the highway!
It was scary. I scream loudly and my brother woke up from his phone. I showed him and he also shocked.
He : Chal dekhake aate hain. Who is she? Why she is sitting like this?
I : 🙄 with the same expression. Are you going mad? Check what time is it? It is almost midnight.
And in the meanwhile she was disappeared!
Yes, she disappeared.
It gave goosebumps!
"Ting tong ' the door bell rang. We both were looking at each other and almost shattered.
To be continued......
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The doorbell! An innocent-looking title holds a lot of suspense. Your way of storytelling is powerful.
ReplyDeleteThank you Mam.
DeleteThe story was going at a good pace but ended all of a sudden... now am wondering where the lady is... Neeta the moment when a reader starts thinking what would have happened next reading your story... do understand you made the reader think .... and that what is your success as writer... Congratulations
ReplyDeleteOhhh, it was my first attempt. Your compliment make my day. Really greatful.
DeleteOh my! Is this a real story or a fictional take? Definitely a spooky one. Looking forward to the next one.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Surely
DeleteThe doorbell gave me goosebumps too. I don't know you write stories too. This is really good. Looking forward to read what happens next.
ReplyDeleteNo mam, I tried first time😀. Glad that you like it.
DeleteEerie story Neeta... esp. the ending. When I started reading I didn't even realize it was a story... I thought it was your actual experience that ur writing about. Only when I reached the chudyail's hair part, I realized it's fiction 😀
ReplyDeleteSo greatful Kaveri. You can connect with that. No it is fiction only.
DeleteThis is a great debut, Neeta. And that was an interesting take on the Blogchatter prompt. You should definitely write more. Waiting to see what's next.
ReplyDeleteThank you Ritu. Yes, you all blogger buddy liked it. It give me confidence. Will surely write.
DeleteAare what happened next... Did she come to have tea coffee LOL thats y she rang the bell
ReplyDeleteOhh yaaa, it will be nice sequence. 😁😁she came for coffee n next story start.
DeleteI was like .. Ooo, now I know what will happen..and suddenly, you will wake up, 😵💫but your brother also saw her—now wondering what will happen next.
ReplyDelete😊 Glad you connect with it and waiting.
Deleteoh please don't try to get that spooky on me again! You got me hooked reading this story and was getting chills towards the end. Must say, great writing! Do more! Not the spooky one though. haha - MommyWithAGoal
ReplyDeleteOMG ! It was so much scary to you.😁 Greatful dear for that.
DeleteYour style of writing is fascinating which makes us to eagerly wait for the next part.
ReplyDeleteThank you Anuradaha.
DeleteWhat an eerie story! I somehow know for sure that she's a ghost! Can't wait for the next part!
ReplyDeleteYes, oblivious she is ghost.
DeleteThis is soooo scary. I could picturise the woman and now I will have nightmares. I hope this turns out to be an innocent lady just sitting on the road or some funny twist to this tale.
ReplyDeleteIs it real? I actually had goosebumps reading it.
ReplyDeleteWooow, this story ended with a gripping ending. Would love to read the next part. You really started with a good thrilling note.
ReplyDeleteWow! Creepy story. I would have died of a heartattack if the door bell rang after witnessing something like this!
ReplyDeleteA scary horror story! I'm keen to find out what happens next!
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